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I know your dark secret,
it fills me with glee.
I hop and I jump delightedly.
When you see me you cower,
your eyes beg me don't tell.  
I stood there laughing
while your tears fell.
Your secret is mine;
forever in my grasp.
I just want you to watch your back.
Cause you never know
when someone will attack.
3/26/10 Edited: 6/8/12 Edited Again: 1/13/13

So........I'm looking through old poetry and decided I needed to post more on here...

PLEASE COMMENT AND GIVE ME THOUGHTS.

THANKS <3
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Writer
While I'm no pro poet, I will say this.
While the flow is good and works well, it didn't leave much of an impact. I think the tone/diction needs to be more brutal/menacing/cruel if it jumps straight to the point. But that's just me.
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SAPPHIRE-PELT Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student General Artist
That's very good
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veloveanime Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wonderful work!
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