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Each scar is because of you.
You're the one to make my blood bloom.
The empty pain I feel inside,
foreshadows my deep demise.
I'm sick of crying,
I'm sorry for trying.
I should have ended when I was born,
then maybe no heart would be torn.
I wish my breath did not start,
and maybe even my heart.
Growing up is the hard part,
I really didn't want to start.
I wish it was easy to say goodbye,
so then maybe I could die.
2/24/12
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winterkate Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Student Writer
Hmm... the rhyme scheme starts halfway in, which is confusing and makes it look like you only just got into the swing of things. It could use a little more original, unorthodox imagery, but the sentiment is solid.
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Poison2007 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very powerful and beautifully written. Wow.

I've run out of works to say now, dayum.
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EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Student Writer
Wow, this is amazing!
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EnlightenU Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not into moody poetry, but this is pretty good for free verse.
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SolemnAdvertence Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah, i agree~
btw~
i like the way you put your feelings on the verse~
very good~
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LetThereBeApples Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is very good. I honestly never remember seeing someone rhyme goodbye and die. Sounds great though,
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SilentSalvation Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Student General Artist
aw thank you.
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ernest-art Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:wow:

this is my feeling right now :(

welldone :clap:
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FireBlazeScorch Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh wow, I really felt the emotion in the piece
And there were a few things I could connect to my self (which in my point of view is a really touching thing you wrote)
Great job and keep it up : )
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roamingtigress Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012
Powerful work. Once again, well written!
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